Golden puppy

W.A.L.T:  Write a narrative

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In Ako Ngatahi we had to write a narrative about a video. It was about a boy opening a present that was a dog with three legs. Here is the video of the present. I hope you enjoy my story.

The Present

Golden

Golden Puppy

I was playing on my x-box when my mum opened the door. Slam! The door shut and mum had a box for me. She opened the blinds so it was hard for me to see. She almost ruined my game and my sight. I thought about the box that was on the table.I put my controls down and opened the box lids.There was a puppy in the box. The colour was blonde and the eyes were brown. When I saw that the puppy had only three legs it looked so disgusting like a pile of junk. So I threw it away on the floor and it landed on its back. I picked up my controls and stared at the puppy. Then I went back to my game. When it was on it’s back it saw a red shiny ball.It ran to the ball and crashed into the cupboards and opened them a little. The puppy managed to grab the ball and put it by my feet. I kicked it away from me and it landed in the box. The puppy raced after it and got trapped inside it. When the puppy came out the ball wasn't in the box. It came out when the puppy was running inside the box. The puppy saw the ball and ran after it. It squeezed the ball tight with its jaws. It looked at me and put the ball in his mouth and ran to me and sometimes the puppy had dropped the ball and picked it back up to make me laugh. It dropped the ball next to my feet and I picked it up put it in my pockets and got my crutches. I went to the door and opened it a little so the puppy could open the rest of the door. The puppy ran threw my legs and ran threw them again. The puppy went on the grass so I threw the ball away and went after the puppy. I think that Mum had got me a one leg puppy is because I had one leg and I think that in the future we might become bestest of the friends.