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Thursday, August 16, 2018

Buster the boxer

W.A.L.T write a story about a video called buster the boxer
I'm writing about a dog named buster. His bread id a boxer.

It was christmas eve and I was standing nodding my head up and down panting, feeling like I was bouncing on a trampoline. Lily, she’s my owner, she was bouncing up and down on her spring bed. The door opened and her Mum came in.
Outside Lily’s window was her Dad building a trampoline. It was lily’s present for christmas which was tomorrow. I went down stairs into the living room to have a nap but before I could, there were two fox’s that came out from between the bush’s that caught the glimpse of my eye. They both went over to the trampoline and climbed up the ladder.
Once they were both in the middle of the trampoline the one who was right in the centre said “let’s bounce around”.
So they both bounced around. After a while a badger came and saw the two fox’s bouncing and having such a good time, he thought that he could join them to.
As soon as the badger was on, the two fox’s said “ We will show you how to bounce on the  trampoline’’.
Once the badger got the hang of it he said “ Ok I get the hang of it now”.
and so one by one a Squirrel and a Hedgehog came aboard to join in the fun.
In the morning Lily was so excited she ran out of her bed and into the living room. She was so surprised about what her eyes were seeing. A trampoline with a bright red ribbon that looked like a cherry. Lily went and ran darting towards her new gift, but suddenly I rushed past Lily and as her face went happy to what. I leaped from the wet and freezing ground onto the nice springy trampoline and started bouncing. I was glad that I finally got to go onto the trampoline but I really didn’t think Lily did.

I hope that you like the video and my story that I wrote about.
Please give feed back and comments. Bye

 Sorry I was ment to publish this last year.


4 comments:

  1. AnonymousAugust 28, 2018 at 9:48 AM


    Kia ora Bailey, my name is Italy a year 6 from Marshland School. I like the way you set out your story it is really good. I like how much detail you put into your writing it makes it more interesting. Your punctuation is very good . Do you have a dog named Buster?

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  2. AnonymousSeptember 3, 2018 at 9:41 AM

    Hi Italy,
    I really like that you have given me a comment. I really love it when people like you pst comments like that.

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  3. michaelSeptember 5, 2018 at 10:34 AM

    I liked the way you made a video of buster the boxer and also wrote about the story. When i read your post I learnt that a fox can climb things. Maybe you can do this in christmas time because you wrote a story that was about christmas

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